15 minutes later, I finished the story. Jesus. You're getting really good. I was gripped until the very end.
If there was one amazing line that stood out among the rest, it was this:
a now-raw soul rubbing against a world of broken glass.
I told him about the angel on the train, how he was beautiful even as he died.
^When I got to this line in the story, I noticed I was confused. I had already forgotten that you had described the absorbed man as "angelic". I didn't make the connection when you then later mentioned an "angel". I had to Ctrl + F to find a previous mention. Angelic is an adjective describing the man, whereas angel is an entirely new noun (in my head).
Besides that, you also wrote "on the train", but there's no mention of a train previously.
You're an excellent writer and I've loved reading your fiction. I thought that I would mention, for the sake of feedback, that these two things took me out of the story enough to come write this comment.
Waking up at the same time every day is as important, if not more important, than the quantity slept (up to a point).
For example, if I go to bed 1-2 hours later than usual, I will still choose to wake up at the same time the next day to maintain my normal circadian rhythm. But if I stay up 3+ hours later than usual, then sleeping in makes me feel better.
I'd do some research online to confirm this for yourself, as well :)
I hereby propose that this song by Marc Rebillet be the official anthem of Inkhaven (especially the spoken word part in the middle of the song) :)
The call and [Redacted] response reminds me of author David Foster Wallace's book Brief Interviews with Hideous Men. He puts a blank question, followed by a response from interviewees. Really forces me to pay attention and try to fill in the blank.
Yours is fun to read, nice job!
No you shouldn't be concerned. What you're doing is a form of HIIT training (ie: High Intensity Interval Training), which is great for cardiovascular health and boosting your metabolism.
While you're choosing to perform HIIT with running, it's not really running in the general sense that I've described in this post. For example, you could perform HIIT with biking, or jump rope, or swimming; anything to increase your heart rate for the duration of some intervals. The sport of running is more about completing longer distances for a sustained time.
As long as you feel healthy and nothing hurts, I don't see anything wrong with doing HIIT as frequently as every other day for your general health. I like your approach of gradually increasing the intensity and shrinking the rest periods. Seems good!
My cross country coach in high school taught me the technique for side stitches. Sucks to do in the moment, but it works every time.
100% agreed on the mileage. The 10% Rule becomes more important once you cross that 10 miles/week threshold.
I also have aphantasia. I found out that I had it at 22 years old when my friend recommended I read The Hobbit by JRR Tolkien.
30 pages in, I told my friend, "This sucks! It feels like Tolkien is trying to paint a picture with his words and I cannot see it!"
She replied, "Uhh, I think you might have aphantasia."
"A fan what?"
I'm not the guy to ask. I've never tried barefoot shoes.
Your explanation for forefoot striking makes sense to me.
I actually tried talking to my mom about this 6 months ago. As I elaborated further and further on all the reasons A-Z why we're fucked, she saw that it was distressing me.
She told me, "If it's bothering you, why think about it? You can choose to go think about something else."
"You're basically saying that I should stick my head in the sand like an ostrich and ignore it?"
"Yes. If we're heading towards the end of the world, which I highly doubt, then you should spend the rest of your time doing what makes you happy."