This grand experiment would be tested, time and time again over the millennia which was to follow.
It should be were not was to agree with the plural millenia (or else millenia should be changed to millenium). The comma is also unnecessary here and interrupts the flow of the sentence.
Sorry my introduction was so long I didn't know quite how to write what I wanted to write and I am not a good enough writer to do a series of posts on it.
There should be a period after "long". You might also consider putting a comma between "write" and "and" (between the two main clauses).
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This grand experiment would be tested, time and time again over the millennia which was to follow.
It should be were not was to agree with the plural millenia (or else millenia should be changed to millenium). The comma is also unnecessary here and interrupts the flow of the sentence.
Sorry my introduction was so long I didn't know quite how to write what I wanted to write and I am not a good enough writer to do a series of posts on it.
There should be a period after "long". You might also consider putting a comma between "write" and "and" (between the two main clauses).
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