My thoughts about the story, perhaps interesting to any future reader trying to decipher the "mysterianism" here, a la these two analyses of sci-fi short stories, or my own attempts at exegeses of videogames like Braid or The Witness. Consider the following also as a token of thanks for all the enjoyment I've recieved from reading Gwern's various analyses over the years.
If the story doesn't have a title, but people want to discuss it, some kind of title will get established by convention, and it should be something that "sounds right" for the story. "Clarity didn't work..." doesn't sound right to me as the title of the story. Also now that you reminded me of this, I went "wait, wasn't the story just commonly known as The Whispering Earring", and indeed, here's /r/rational calling it that in 2019.
Clarity didn't work, trying mysterianism