The more recent versions here just seem like better writing to me honestly. Short simple sentences which communicate a single idea are good.
If that makes them easy to read for the less literate, so much the better; they're even easier to read for the more literate, no?
I am someone who loves long, complex sentences. The 19th century was peak prose style for me. The Gettysburg Address is a fantastic bit of writing. The fiction of that time can be a joy.
But this style is hard to do well. The Emily Post example given above is readable, though not unusually inspired. It moves through a series of examples and exceptions in a faintly herky-jerky way. But the prose is well-enough fit to Emily Post's goal. She is trying to introduce many of her readers to the manners of a different social class, and her choice of vocabulary and syntax are part of that. Her readers wish to appear refined, and thus, some fancy words will please them.
Contrast this with Alexis de Tocqueville's De la Démocratie en Amérique from 1835. This is often considered an unusually good example of aristiocratic prose, at least among the sort of people who write academic introductions:
Parmi les objets nouveaux qui, pendant mon séjour aux États-Unis, ont attiré mon attention, aucun n’a plus vivement frappé mes regards que l’égalité des conditions. Je découvris sans peine l’influence prodigieuse qu’exerce ce premier fait sur la marche de la société ; il donne à l’esprit public une certaine direction, un certain tour aux lois ; aux gouvernants des maximes nouvelles, et des habitudes particulières aux gouvernés.
Bientôt je reconnus que ce même fait étend son influence fort au-delà des mœurs politiques et des lois, et qu’il n’obtient pas moins d’empire sur la société civile que sur le gouvernement : il crée des opinions, fait naître des sentiments, suggère des usages et modifie tout ce qu’il ne produit pas.
Ainsi donc, à mesure que j’étudiais la société américaine, je voyais de plus en plus, dans l’égalité des conditions, le fait générateur dont chaque fait particulier semblait descendre, et je le retrouvais sans cesse devant moi comme un point central où toutes mes observations venaient aboutir.
If you don't read French, look at the length of the sentences and the punctuation. There is a great degree of parallelism here, and a pleasing rhythm. You could, if you wished to be overly cute about it, reformat much of this writing as a series of bulleted lists. But if you diagrammed the sentences, the structure would be quite clean. Tocqueville is a masterful writer, and here he wishes to convey two things: his own impeccable elite credentials, and his sincere enthusiasm for the egalitarian nature of American society. His goal is to maximize genuine reform in France, while minimizing elite decapitations. This is a subject of immediate interest to his readers.
But for every Alexis de Tocqueville, I could find you a hundred or a thousand writers who wrote needlessly convoluted slop. Long sentences are hard to do well. They demand an almost clockwork precision to remain truly clear.
Today, 19th-century prose is out of fashion. Multiple factors drove this change, including the influence of writers like Hemingway, a frustration with hopelessly convoluted prose, and a growing impatience on the part of readers drowning in oceans of text. And, yes, a vast increase in the portion of the population with a college education. And of course we explain the basics more than we did, because we are increasingly conscious of a broad audience with many odd gaps in their knowledge. Every skipped step risks losing a reader who might have benefited from an author's thoughts. And some of our readers may even speak English as a second or third language. Even if they are extremely well educated in their native tongue, they may not realize that the "anthropology" department teaches very different things in the US than it does in Europe.
The modern style can be done well, though doing it truly well still demands considerable skill. Perhaps more interestingly, the modern style usually fails more gracefully. Simple sentences and bulleted lists usually succeed in conveying the author's main points, even if the author is a mediocre writer.
And, yes, a vast increase in the portion of the population with a college education. And of course we explain the basics more than we did, because we are increasingly conscious of a broad audience with many odd gaps in their knowledge. Every skipped step risks losing a reader who might have benefited from an author's thoughts. And some of our readers may even speak English as a second or third language.
If this is true, I wonder if the advent of AI will lead to prose in books that doesn't have to do this anymore, because the reader-otherwise-left-behind can just ask AI if they end up confused about something.
I wonder if you missed the other differences, like the constant explanation to the reader of things they must already know. There have been plenty of writers throughout history known for their brevity who did not waste it explaining the obvious. I don't mind short, simple sentences, though as the book I'm currently reading [[1]] suggests, the "brevity of Seneca and Tacitus" can be "too artificially epigrammatic", and too much concision risks "sail[ing] down to posterity in an armada of nutshells." I think a little wordiness, a little complexity gives writing a bit of room to breathe. Don't write Gordian Knot sentences, but I think a little complexity is okay and basically doesn't risk confusing a literate reader.
Style, the Art of Writing Well by F. L. Lucas ↩︎
Yeah, I agree that the modern version of Ettiquite is worse, but that's just because we don't have very complicated ettiquite! They need to waste space here, because everyone already knows what a handshake is, and you need at most a one-sentence description. If you didn't turn every sentence into a paragraph the book would quickly turn into a blog post.
The solution is not in fact to add more flowery prose or complicated sentences, its to write about something else.
I also don't know whether those reading in 1922 would say the same thing. We read the 1922 version and think "Oh wow! So informative!", but perhaps the girls forced to read the book at a 1922 finishing school were thinking the same thing, or maybe ettiquite in 1922 was just a lot more complicated than it is today (it is).
Perhaps, similarly to the hypothetical bored girl in finishing school, in 100 years the future will look at the modern version and think "So informative!".
The solution is not in fact to add more flowery prose or complicated sentences, its to write about something else.
I would certainly never suggest this. You seem to be implying that good prose is independent of useful prose, but it's not. Good prose isn't just flowery and fancy, it is respectful of the reader and their time, and delivers a message clearly and in an entertaining way.
It seems like you're acknowledging the 2022 version is a bloated waste of space, while also suggesting at the same time that actually it's very informative, and that this is all just relative? I definitely do not believe this is all just relative, or that girls forced to read Emily Post in the 1920s would have thought the writing in the book was hollow. It's clearly full of useful information. Not to mention wit and charm. I weep for the future of our species if women in 2122 would think the 2022 version was "so informative!"
I guess my point is that the fact the 2022 version sucks is predicted on my model from the fact that we just don't use too much complicated etiquette anymore. The fact the sentences are hollow is a fact more about the subject being written, not the skill of the author.
Concretely, using the Wikipedia page for modern handshaking in the US I think gives better prose than the modern 2022 version of the etiquette guide
The handshake is commonly done upon meeting, greeting, parting, offering congratulations, expressing gratitude, or as a public sign of completing a business or diplomatic agreement. In sports, it is also done as a sign of good sportsmanship. Its purpose is to convey trust, respect, balance, and equality.[10] If it is done to form an agreement, the agreement is not official until the hands are parted.
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In the United States, United Kingdom and Canada, a traditional handshake is firm, executed with the right hand, with good posture and eye contact. A handshake where both parties are standing up is deemed as good etiquette.
Alternative theory is that in the past substantial part of the readers actually didn't understand this complex prose, and modern authors are just better at being understood.
Everyone was just pretending to understand each other? Some kind of social signaling game? Is there a reason this seems plausible to you?
Hmm, I sometimes do math tutoring and my mother does it professionally. And we observe that very common barrier to solve word problems is to actually extract facts from the statement.
Also, I play quiz game where the questions are not just about erudition, but about connecting several facts about the answer. And when I show these questions to someone I often see that person don't understand how the text of the question forces conditions on what answer can be.
In both cases they usually don't understand that they don't understand the text.
Great article - provides clear examples of a trend that we've all quietly suspected. There is, however, one thing that I think it misses:
If the average American has barely improved, what about the intellectual class? That is, those Americans who have at least attended some college?
In the American 1950's (and in virtually every other country with a globally-respected education system today), college attendance was something for the top ten percent of the population. At present, 39 percent of 25- to 29-year-olds have a Bachelor's degree, and nearly half have a degree of some kind.
While the dumbing-down of college can be somewhat ameliorated by the stratification of the college experience that we've seen (a State U degree used to be prestigious!), with 'top-college education' replacing 'college education' in our culture, in practice, it's very hard to make a clean break, especially seeing as the U.S. education system is allergic to the idea that one person might ever be inextricably more qualified than another on the basis of their intelligence or natural work ethic. Proposals for a German - style path system, in which students that aren't likely to thrive in higher education are directed towards careers they're more likely to do well with, have been repeatedly shot down on this grounds.
Worth pointing out that high school has had a similar issue. NCLB made a lot of people feel better about themselves, but it essentially destroyed the last vestiges of rigor in the public school system. You can't build a meaningful HS degree around the -2sd kid that isn't allowed to wait a year and go over difficult material again, and is strongly discouraged from dropping out at 17 and getting an early start on his career (which would be significantly kinder for him - the extra money helps, and not everyone can learn Calculus).
Thanks! I definitely agree, and that's what I was alluding to when I said more people were entering the intellectual class, possibly diluting its literacy. I learned about this from Paul Fussell's book Class. He suggested the same number of people, around ten percent, are still going to real university, and the rest are essentially fakes.
I'm not sure what it's like for American high schools, but in Alberta (Canada) we had different streams for different kids. Dash-1 courses were for academic stream kids, dash-2 was either non-academic or for someone who wants a college certificate or a trade, dash-3 focuses on employability, and dash-4 is for students with learning disabilities. There was also an extra distinction between normal dash-1 students and dash-1 students who were also taking the IB program, which is like AP. I've never thought about it, but I've never heard of anything like this in America, and I wonder if it's common or not. It seems like a pretty good idea to keep different groups of students separate. Though I don't really see a point of having the dash-2 and dash-3 students there at all. Let them join the workforce and make some money. It doesn't matter how valuable you think the information is for them. They're not paying attention anyway.
He suggested the same number of people, around ten percent, are still going to real university,
That's an interesting position. It makes sense to me that that's the number that'd have the qualifications to do so, but are they still getting the same quality of education today?
I'm not sure what it's like for American high schools, but in Alberta (Canada) we had different streams for different kids. Dash-1 courses were for academic stream kids, dash-2 was either non-academic or for someone who wants a college certificate or a trade, dash-3 focuses on employability, and dash-4 is for students with learning disabilities.
That's a very common-sense system, seems like a gentler version of what Germany and Korea do. Unfortunately, the U.S. system doesn't look anything like it. We have only one track, with differentiation delivered in theory through AP courses (advanced kids) and special education (kids with severe learning disabilities) courses. Unfortunately, the former are a constant political target, and the latter are constantly in the process of "mainstreaming" students that are unsuited to standard classes by dropping them into gen. ed.
I actually think that it is both predictable and also a merit to our society that doctors are dumber than they used to be. Following Whitehead’s precept that “Civilization advances by extending the number of important operations which we can perform without thinking of them”, we’d ideally at once broaden the pool of potentially qualified medical practitioners and reduce the difficulty of succeeding at their profession.
If, in the future, any Homer Simpson can safely suture your wounds and chemotherapize your cancers, would you insist they had the reading skills of a medical student of the 1860s?
I don't mind if Homer Simpson sutures my wounds, as long as there's a pathway to me getting in front of a real brilliant person if I have a tricky health problem. The problems start when Homer Simpson starts thinking he's brilliant and starts blaming you when he can't figure out what's wrong with you. And when you can't tell him apart from the real brilliant people.
Alternate explanation: Anything worth reprinting with multiple editions and updates over the years is likely to have been first written by an inspired and gifted writer. Any given editor is likely to lack the same pizzazz as the original author, and so over the years, the life of the work is likely to ebb away.
If you want to find great writing, perhaps you're more likely to find it in the great first edition novels of our time, rather than in 30th edition updated texts which, for all I know, sell more on name recognition than anything else.
I don't fully buy this alternate explanation, because I find the same increase in literacy when I read older books that were not so popular even when they were published. I've even read some letters written by normal people in the '70s, and they seemed to be shockingly literate for normal people.
That said, I'm sure the effect you're pointing to is real, I just don't think it's the whole story.
Another possible thing that is going on is that older texts appear more posh and sophisticated because they use older vocab like "posh" that have fallen outside the mainstream. I wouldn't put too much stock in this explanation (and it doesn't directly relate to the stylistic changes you point out), but I do think older language is part of the appeal for me when I pick up an old book.
The evidence I am about to ask for may exist! However, I am still comfortable asking for it, as without it the whole thing falls apart, and I think this class of argument really always needs to show this explicitly: can you show that literally anyone reads the “modern Centennial Edition of Etiquette released in 2022?”
I don't think it's wildly popular, but it has around 500 reviews on the Canadian Amazon, which seems okay for a reference book, and is similar to the number of reviews for If Anyone Builds It, Everyone Dies. I think they keep making new editions because it's popular enough. I don't know how to estimate more precisely than that.
I’ll grant that the quotations from the centennial Etiquette are simply horrendous, but apart from its prose defects it should be noted that we currently live in a society in which the concept of ‘good breeding’ has no proper equivalent (big loss imo), social skill is defined more by charm than class (mixed bag), and business etiquette has been elevated to a minimal cross-cultural norm of tolerance and non-offensiveness (big win). So we should in general expect a modern treatment of manners to be vaguer, and more people to read other sorts of books for social advice.
(Cross-posted from my Substack; written as part of the Halfhaven virtual blogging camp)
Oh, you read Emily Post’s Etiquette? What version? There’s a significant difference between versions, and that difference reflects the declining literacy of the American intellectual.
I looked into this because I noticed books published before the ’70s or ‘80s seemed to be written with an assumption of the reader’s competence that is no longer present in many modern texts.
Take Emily Post’s Etiquette. The force of her intellect and personality came through in the 1922 original:
The reader is assumed to understand basic ideas, and trusted to use their judgment to navigate social situations. Now take the modern Centennial Edition of Etiquette released in 2022:
It then goes on to describe each of these five elements in detail in a numbered list. Modern readers love a good numbered list, or a bullet-point list. Much easier than paragraphs, which to the modern reader are like the open ocean, and carry a risk of drowning.
The empty sentences grate. The explanation of the obvious is painful. Notice how much focus is on the physical mechanics of shaking a hand, rather than on understanding of social rules. And does the reader really need to be told about the “deep symbolic roots” of the handshake, or that they need to put “the right amount of energy” into it? If so, is it really necessary to later explain in further detail exactly what that means? I’d have thought the phrase “the right amount of energy” itself was clear and didn’t require elaboration. But Emily Post’s descendants disagree.
A person might have been excused for thinking the 2022 version would be much like the original, only updated to account for modern etiquette. But unless you did your homework, you wouldn’t realize you’d been robbed! Instead of the vigorous style of classic Post:
You get this:
Apparently modern people need to be told to ask questions when they have a question, and to not ignore an usher when he tells them to be quiet. If Emily Post had been less polite, maybe she’d have told her grandchildren they were nitwits and to keep their hands off her book.
Another book which has been continually published for more than a century is Gray’s Anatomy — the “doctor’s bible” that’s the namesake of the medical TV-show of the same name (though the show spells Grey with an ‘e’). I wanted to see if the same pattern held up as with Emily Post’s Etiquette. It’s a bit hard, since the book has expanded a lot since the original, which was only concerned with muscles, bones, and joints, and made nearly no mention of even the human heart! The modern version is a complete map of human anatomy. Nevertheless, I found some similar passages in the 1860 version:
And the 2020 version:
They are both quite information-dense (as is the human body). It’s not easy to say one of these quotations is better than the other, or more simplified. Look at this snippet from the introduction of the 2020 edition:
It seems the 2020 Gray’s Anatomy is written at a similar reading level to the 1860 edition. I would have concluded from this experiment that I was wrong, and that Emily Post’s Etiquette was an unfortunate exception, but there was one thing that bothered me: I have met many doctors in my life. Some of them were quite bright. But many were simply not intelligent enough that I would believe they had ever read and understood an entire textbook written in this fashion. Some, I’m surprised they can tell a stepstool from a stethoscope.
I did some digging, and it turns out that while the original Gray’s Anatomy was written specifically for medical students, the newer version is used as a reference text, and is considered too dense for medical students. The reading level of the original has been preserved, but its purpose has shifted.
Even more digging revealed that there’s a new Gray’s Anatomy for Students that fills in the role of the original. Let’s take a look:
Ah, there’s that 21st-century hollowness! That disrespectful prose that tells the reader what they must already know! The 1860 Gray’s Anatomy needed no introduction at all. It was assumed the medical students would understand what was meant by the word “anatomy”. The modern Gray’s Anatomy opts for completeness and includes an introduction, but goes straight into important clarifications. But in the for Students edition, the reader apparently needs it explained to them that anatomy can help doctors diagnose diseases, and that correct interpretation of what they see in their patients’ bodies, rather than incorrect interpretation, would be a good thing.
Here’s the 1860 version describing joints:
Clear. Trusts the reader to be able to read. It’s hard to find directly comparable passages with the 2020 Gray’s Anatomy for Students, but this is close enough:
There’s that bullet-point list again. Gray’s Anatomy for Students makes heavy use of bold keywords and bullet-point lists. These techniques make any text easier to understand — for the barely-literate.
Obviously Gray’s Anatomy for Students is the better medical textbook, having been written in the 21st-century. There was a lot we didn’t know about the body in 1860. Likewise, Etiquette, The Centennial Edition is probably more applicable in the 21st-century than the outmoded and gendered rules of the original edition. But while the quality of information has improved, the delivery has not (aside from the addition of images and diagrams to the medical texts). Authors now feel the need to talk down to university students like they’re idiots. What’s changed?
Literacy rates in the USA have risen from only 80% in 1870, to 99% today.[1] Literacy rates eventually became pointless to measure in America, because everyone could read at least a bit. Instead, they started measuring reading level in 1971. The reading level has barely budged since, increasing only slightly since the ’70s.[2]
If the average American has barely improved, what about the intellectual class? That is, those Americans who have at least attended some college?
Verbal/reading SAT scores of college-bound students have steadily decreased since the 1950s,[3] giving some indication that the average literacy of the intellectual class is dropping. Whether that’s because the same number of intellectuals are losing their ability to read complex texts, or because more people are entering the intellectual class, diluting the score, I don’t really care. The takeaway is that terms like “intellectual”, “college-educated”, or “expert” don’t mean what they used to, because the people these terms apply to increasingly cannot read.
To not seem like an elitist, I should say that I’m as much a victim of this effect as anyone else. I was raised on the same diet of picture-book textbooks and ChatGPT-tier hollow prose as every other academic student, and my literacy suffers as a result. Only recently am I making an effort to read things that are a little more challenging. Things written before the ’80s. Currently, I’m reading Style by F. L. Lucas. I also recently read Class by Paul Fussell, which was highly entertaining and a great place to start if you want to try out some pre-80s reading.
As a class, the real experts are still around, I think. But now they have the same titles and degrees as the countless “nouveau experts”, and so nobody can tell which experts are worth trusting. All we can do is develop our own literacy and do our thinking for ourselves.
https://nces.ed.gov/naal/lit_history.asp
https://nces.ed.gov/programs/coe/pdf/coe_cnj.pdf
https://www.erikthered.com/tutor/historical-average-SAT-scores.pdf This table is a bit confusing if you just look at it. You have to know that SAT data was recentered in 1995 and again in 2016. It really does represent a continual decline, even though the scores suddenly jump up in 2017.